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    dua kisi ke liye

    Meray luboun pey sajji hai Dua kisi key Liye
    Meray Khuda mujhe hansna sikha kisi key Liye


    Mujhe yaqeen hai yeh mujh sey na hoo sakey ga magar
    Mein ker raha houn kisi sey wafa kisi key Liye


    Nahin milounga agar khoo diya to ney
    Na apney haath sey gawa mujhe kisi key Liye


    Meray janoon ko to yeh baat bhi ganwara hai
    Meray Liye na sahi phir bhi Aaa kisi key Liye

    Mein saath saath houn uss key baadbaan ki tarah
    Meray Khuda meri sansein barha kisi key liye.....
    Patta patta boota boota haal hamaara jaane hai
    Jaane na jaane gul he na jaane, baagh to saara jaane hai

    #2
    Re: dua kisi ke liye

    Very Nice... Its Very good...

    Two Ash'ar Jin ke First Misray Need some Changes..

    1. Nahin milounga agar khoo diya to ney

    Its not in the Same Rhyme as other Verses... If You could Change it to.......
    e.g. NahiN miloonga agar hum ko kho dia tum ne
    OR.. NaheeN miloNga agar Tum ne kho dia hum ko .. Tou iss maiN Rawani Ajayegi.

    2. Mein saath saath houn uss key baadbaan ki tarah
    Here... Badan is Blocking the Continuity .... U can Either Change it or Put or Remove some words...
    e.g. MaiN Saath saath houN usske HaseeN badan ki Tarha
    Meray Khuda meri sansein barha kisi key liye.....
    (\__/)
    (_)
    JabBhi Milti Hay Mujhay.......

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      #3
      Re: dua kisi ke liye

      Boht khoob frozenfire...

      keep it up
      ~ ... palat k har taraf se kyon nazR us shaks per thehrii?
      wafa k silsilo`N kii wo, musalsal inteha thehra
      ...~

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